Chrissie Bligh

is pondering Chekhov’s Smoking Gun. “If you fire a gun in Act III, it must be seen on the wall in Act I; and if you show a gun on the wall.

And, is currently reading Selected Short Stories by Chekhov.

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22/10/2011RachelNicole14
I apolagize for the harrassment. I hope you are alright.
14/08/2011PaulY
Maybe you could be right that your stories doesn't interest me or most other readers. But by the same token, if my stories don't interest you, maybe you shouldn't read mine. Also, I know about your culture, you don't know mine. Even though I am Brazilian, I am 80@ Canadian by culture. I feel possibly, you being from the UK, Americans and Canadian writers express themselves differently and critique wise it would'nt be an fair evaluation in some aspects.I mostly read american authors'books.
14/08/2011PaulY
Maybe you could be right that my stories doesn't interest me or most other readers. But by the same token, if my stories don't interest you, maybe you shouldn't read mine. Also, I know about your culture, you don't know mine. Even though I am Brazilian, I am 80@ Canadian by culture. I feel possibly, you being from the UK, Americans and Canadian writers express themselves differently and critique wise it would'nt be an fair evaluation in some aspects.I mostly read american authors'books.
14/08/2011PaulY
You may have understood the plot but you still don't quite understand the roles of characters. Everybody I know understood the characters and all was positive. It is understood without saying based on theme of the story that Tony and Doris wanted Jack's dead and his money so they tricked him. It's that simple. Doris went along with Jack's idea intentionally. Also, I don't know what you mean by "wooden" characters. You have to simplify that term. If it means "dry" then that...
14/08/2011PaulY
The Plan:I don't think you comprehended the story well to ask that question:"If Doris didn't care for Jack, why did she fall in with his plan?" If you understood the ending you will note that Tony and Doris conned Jack (not double cross_that's different) so she had to make it look like she was on his side. I notice your comments also on other people's stories you don't quite understand what you read and this too me makes your comments invaluable. It must be you being british or it's...
09/08/2011overcast
I will read more of your stories as I have time. Thank you for your advise.
07/08/2011PaulY
You comment on:"..less interested in whether people like or don't like my stories that in why they like or don't like them". First, you have to realize these are "grassroots writers" and many very young among everything else. You may not be suited for this one;your expectations, maturity, your approach and how you critique. In some areas I maybe the same. In every negative critique I always try to add at least two positive. Also here there is not always enough space to...
07/08/2011r.vijay
ur stories r really gud. i luved ur stories. They r really gud.
06/08/2011PaulY
Your story:My Love. When a story is "boring" that says it all, there is no need to elaborate. It means that it's content is not interesting to a reader. Like in many other art forms, there will be people that will like what you have and others will not. You may be familiar with the term: Different strokes for different folks. Really for us all, the end result is not what I like, what your son likes but what a publisher likes in what you have. Your son would not be an ideal critic for...
06/08/2011PaulY
Your story:My Love. When a story is "boring" that says it all, there is no need to elaborate. It means that it's content is not interesting to a reader. Like in many other art forms, there will be people that will like what you have and others will not. You may be familiar with the term: Different strokes for different folks. Really for us all, the end result is not what I like, what your son likes but what a publisher likes in what you have. Your son would not be an ideal critic for...
04/08/2011PaulY
On High School: You have to realize (and come out of the "narrow minded" mode) that WE ARE NOT PROFESSIONAL WRITERS, that includes you. Not reading a story is your option, but commenting on just the format is not critiquing the story without reading it. I think you "missed the boat" on what Bibliofaction is all about. Would it be Ok also for me to say that in your story, "You have great format but..you stories are downright boring!" Formats are 10% and can be...
26/07/2011Ani
Thanks I really appreciated your comment yeah its really full on im going to revise it and I will use your helpful suggestions :D
24/07/2011PaulY
Thanks I appreciated you comment.
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011Ani
well i have read a few, but the non adult thrillers are usually for me drags (from what ive read) and all the adult ones ive come across are a bit too out of my range, in terms of using sexuality which disturbs me but there were a few that were good. and i'm now trying to find good stories but its hard. haha :) thabnks for your critique and ive made a new story and editing my other one :)
24/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
The message I sent to March.Post will appear to everyone who visits her site and reads the messages sent to her. I may get kicked off bibilo faction or get a letter bomb from March.Post. If you don' hear from me again, you'll know why.
Bill
24/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
The message I sent to March.Post will appear to everyone who visits her site and reads the messages sent to her. I may get kicked off bibilo faction or get a letter bomb from March.Post. If you don' hear from me again, you'll know why.
Bill
24/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie
I wasn't aware that someone else had thought of cyanide in a inhaler. I have googled can't find site better than this. Editing on this site is a problem for me too. I have to delete and re-post.
Check story "The Field" Read abusive critique by March.Postings. I sent her a message and I expect an angry reply. You might want to add your two cents.
Thanks for the help with Georgeine.
23/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
I deleted both "Georgeine" and "It was a dark stormy night". I rewrote the endings on both using your suggestions and republished them. hope they meet your approval. In Georgeine I let the reader know that she had choked her last husband to death and left the reader wondering if it might happen again.

Bill
23/07/2011finkland
Regarding "Stormy Night" I reread the ending and I agree with you. I think it's
too short and abrupt I didn't feel comfortable with it either. I'll work on it and let you know- You're my best critic.
23/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie
Story just posted by 13 year old
"Your mine (Not)" You have to read it. Amazing for a thirteen year old. I just posted one also "It Was a Dark Stormy Night" Don't get upset about the title until you read it...Site much improved

Bill
23/07/2011finkland
Took your advice rewrote the ending. Georgeine was incarcerated because she killed her last husband. She was a sleep walker and strangled him while while she was asleep. Now wears a cowbell tied to her ankle when she goes to bed, just in case.
Thanks Bill
22/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
Thinks for the input on Georgeine. I'm still having problems with endings- got any suggestions?

Bill
22/07/2011PythonWorshipper
Thanks for the comment though it wasn't meant to be particularly cohesive or complex, it was only meant to be an amusing story. I wasn't going for Shakespeare or anything :)
22/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
I read the new ending on "Ticket" I like it better. The site appears to have changed at least on my computer. Stories appear jammed to left side of page. Not centered. I don't like it. Maybe it is a goof by webmaster. What do you think?
Site very slow for me.

Bill
21/07/2011finkland
Hi Chrissie,
The website is terribly slow. Sometimes I have to wait as much as two minutes to access a link. Are you having the same trouble?

Posted a new story today.

Ann made bamboo soup yesterday. Kind of like eating pieces of wood- not my favorite, however the ingredients are cheap. Ann is Thai.
19/07/2011Jeyssika
Thank you for reading it :) & glad you liked the descriptions - which I agree I usually don't like either.
But yeah I know; I wasn't going to publish it because I've been in a weird mood tonight and as my stories write themselves it came out peculiar and, as you said, kinda awkwardly paced. Just how it happened I suppose :) x
19/07/2011finkland
I read your critique of the Impossible painting. I took note of it. I wrote another, Not quite so anecdotal. The style but not the story was inspired by Edgar Allen Poe. The story is "The Soul"
Thanks for your criticism. Only recently started trying to write.

I downloaded all five five volumes of his work from gutenberg.org and moved them to my ebook reader. Many books all free. Going to read all your stories. Just found them.

Bill
18/07/2011RachelNicole14
Thank you very much for your words Chrissie, they mean a lot. I really hope we will stay in touch,, I'll try to read some of your writing. Thanks agian.
18/07/2011seduclint
thank you for reviewing my story the beach. i really really apreciate it. i agree with your critiques. i plan on posting a revised version.
17/07/2011finkland
Thanks for the tip. I made up the name "Moldova" I wasn't aware that there was such a country- Ignorant me. I will edit it on my computer. I'll take your suggestion and see I can improve on it.

Bill
17/07/2011finkland
Chrissie,
I have no problems with my bank in the U.S. I changed my account to a joint account with my son before I moved to Thailand in order for him to sort out any problems I might have. This government is corrupt. I don't trust Thai banks. I keep my money in the U.S. A personal check drawn on my account in the U.S. takes 2 months for Thai banks to clear it. I thought I read something about U.K. banks not wanting to deal with Thailand.?? Don't blame them. My Visa debit card OK here.
16/07/2011BornToThePurple
Thank for the helpful feedback. I will check out one of your stories soon. :-)
15/07/2011seduclint
thanks for the input about my story. some people told me they couldn't follow the plot in my first version of the clerk, and they thought the ending was weak. so i changed it up and shortened it. but i like my first version better as well. i'll re-post it.
15/07/2011gdjuric
Chrissie, if you struggle with plots, just eliminate them! Dialogues too. As long as a story has its inner entity, a roundup as I call it, you're fine. That means that you write inside-out, not the other way around. And don't forget to update your profile!
12/07/2011PythonWorshipper
Thanks for the comments - but it's not so much confidence (i don't think) as much as just trying to be humorous - and yeh it definitely did tail off towards the end - the wuthering heights bit was just because I dislike the book, I felt that within the confines of a short story was an appropriate time to make my feelings heard :) And, I try not to take myself seriously because I've no desire for anyone to take my stories seriously themselves. Anyway, thanks for the feedback, much appreciated
12/07/2011Coconut
Hey Chrissie - thank you for your message. I have had a look around and noticed that not many stories had comments too - I was disappointed. I will have a look through yours and try to make some comments, although I don't know how much use I will be having never done anything like this before!
11/07/2011Marmalade Queen
Ooooops...rather a lot of typos in that last message. My other BIG weakness is proof-reading. I just don't seem to spot my own mistakes.
11/07/2011Marmalade Queen
I write for pleasure. Just as I read, I like the way I can get really immersed in writing a story.

My biggest challenge seems to be plot - any suggestions in how I can imnprove would be very welcome.

I post them my stories here because it would be really lovely to have a few people read my stories, and even better if they enjoyed reading them.

I also write novels.
11/07/2011tamelamiles
Hi,Chrissie!Your feedback was excellent. Now I know exactly how to edit my story, Ex-Girlfriend, to make it better. I look forward to reading your work, as well. Your story titles alone are exciting. Thanks! : )

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Fullname: Chrissie Bligh
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About Me: I have left this site owing to the bullying behaviour of some other site members. I have also found another site where people are more serious about giving and accepting critiques of their work, in order that they can improve as writers. I leave with 2,730 bibliobucks, gained primarily through (a) people marking my critiques as really helpful and (b) winning 1st prize in the story competition. I hope the people here who bullied me feel pleased with themselves.

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