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Paul Y.

is alive! I finally finished a Novella (87-page book). It took 8-months w/a few hours a week. I'm so glad it's done!!

And, is currently reading nothing..take'n a break! by ;).

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  1. Yelle Hughes
    08/10/2013Yelle
    Hey PaulY it's been a long time. I've got so much to tell you and show you. I want to find out how your writings going and bring you to my group. Hope you see this and contact me.
    Yelle
  2. Syedia Aishah
    04/09/2013aishah
    Hey Paul! It's been months since I have been on here! Finally back. I hope your studies are going well. Can't wait to read your stuff :)

    Keep smiling!
  3. Syedia Aishah
    19/04/2013aishah
    I managed to accidentaly post this post on my own message board!

    Hi, 2:12am, good God! It’s 10:54am over here in the UK now. The years will fly by and you won’t even know where your time went! Good luck with it all though. Although i’m probably of little use, but do give me a shout if you need any help with your studies. A grey hair haha. Your friend is right you’re turning into a wise man now!

    Speak soon friend.
  4. Syedia Aishah
    18/04/2013aishah
    Hi Paul, sorry for the mega late reply. I’ve been so busy with marking course works and preparing students for exams. I will have a read of your poem and the story ‘Bad Boy.’ Cool, an MBA program. Excellent. How long have you got let at university? I’m sure there’s a lot of research – feel for you! Won’t be long until it’s done and dusted, just keep your head down with the uni work . Can’t wait to finally read you work :)
  5. Syedia Aishah
    28/03/2013aishah
    Hi PaulY! I think your poetry is great, honestly. I love poetry that is written from the heart, just like you said you do. Forced poetry does not have the same beauty.

    What are you studying at university?
    Oh and yeah that pic is from my graduation! Take care love.
  6. Syedia Aishah
    26/03/2013aishah
    Hey PaulY I really loved Letters from God. Bless your little cousin!

    I will read the story you recommended. I love your work.

    Take care and please keep writing :)
  7. Syedia Aishah
    26/03/2013aishah
    Hey PaulY I really loved Letters from God. Bless your little cousin!

    I will read the story you recommended. I love your work.

    Take care and please keep writing :)
  8. Teresa Barnes
    14/11/2012teresa0223
    Thank you so much Paul for you comment -ref- Archie the hedgehog
    book three will be on next week
    Teresa
  9. Shelley Adams
    30/08/2012hotcat123
    Hey, what's up I was cleaing up my room and found some peomes I wrote back in high school. I tried posting 2, of the less emo, LOL. But, for some reason the publishing button didn't work. Maybe it's fates way of saying that there no good;).
  10. Shelley Adams
    30/08/2012hotcat123
    Hey, what's up I was cleaing up my room and found some peomes I wrote back in high school. I tried posting 2, of the less emo, LOL. But, for some reason the publishing button didn't work. Maybe it's fates way of saying that there no good;).
  11. Shelley Adams
    16/07/2012hotcat123
    Hey, just posted. Thought you'd like to know. Be kind, it's another slow one. But only 7 pagers, half of my last story, yeah!
  12. Shelley Adams
    09/07/2012hotcat123
    Hey, thanks for the comment, it helps. I'm trying to look for a hard copy of the story I lost. Hopefully I'll have it up soon.
  13. Shelley Adams
    05/07/2012hotcat123
    Hey, just letting you know I just posted. Hope it;s not to long.
  14. Shelley Adams
    03/07/2012hotcat123
    Hey,what's up? I just want to let you know that I started a new story.Lets hope I don't lose this one. Don't know when I'll finish. I have a good start.Its about a girl this time, no dead Grandparents. I'm trying for a happy ending, but you know how stories take over and write themselves.
  15. Shelley Adams
    02/07/2012hotcat123
    Sorry for not posting. It always takes me forever write a story, short attention span. I was going to post a short story, but than lost my flash drive. Teaches me not to save stories on one source.
    P.s.: I can't draw hands that's why my sleeves are so long.
  16. Jessica Sparks
    07/05/2012mileyrocks01
    Hi Poopppyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy







    what the fuk?Oh srry Paul that wz my little couzin!
  17. Pen Name
    07/05/2012jugularnotch
    Okay, so sorry! I have been working on some music for the past several weeks and haven't been back to the site. At long last, I have commented on your story. A lot. :)
  18. Pen Name
    21/04/2012jugularnotch
    Paul, I have never done this before, and I will probably not do it again, but you mentioned that take "reading request", so... I have written a story called "The Wretched Ones", and it's very long and I'm afraid it may be prohibitively so. If you get ten free minutes ever, would you be so kind as to look it over and tell me if it works? I thank you from the bottom of my heart, sir. Oh, and I meant you were established in that you have written a lot more than I have :).
  19. Frankie Maltby
    19/04/2012Ribbit
    Hi Paul, I became a Brony (which is a fan of my little pony friendship is magic outside of its target demographic.) The community has produced some amazing things, the main ones being in the forms of music, artwork, and fanfictions. I'm starting my own fanfic right now so star hill is on hold for now. I hope everything is great with you and I can't wait to read your new story. Is your profile picture dracula? It's very eye catching, I can't stop staring at it.
  20. Jessica Sparks
    05/04/2012mileyrocks01
    Good btw this is me in this picture=)
    yes i have been extremely Bussy
  21. Jessica Sparks
    03/04/2012mileyrocks01
    Hey Pauly xD lolz jk how u been
  22. Maryam Salvotre
    22/03/2012Aphrodite
    wow you are leading pretty cool life right now doctor have prescribed me bed rest so I am not studying for 2 days
  23. Maryam Salvotre
    22/03/2012Aphrodite
    wow you are leading pretty cool life right now doctor have prescribed me bed rest so I am not studying for 2 days
  24. Yelle Hughes
    21/03/2012Yelle
    Hi PaulY, I know it's been awhile again but I have great news! I'm with a new pub co called anewbeginningpublishing.com and I'm now scrambling to get everything finished on my first book. I will check in from time to time but got to get this done. Have a good one! Yelle
  25. Maryam Salvotre
    16/03/2012Aphrodite
    yeah like always I am studying its great that you are writing novella may you become successful at it .my cambridge exams are in may and every night I am having nightmares I dont have enough time to open bibliofaction every day due to tution classes which I am attending everyday I hardly have time.for anything else now the motto of my life is study ,study and study.i bet your life would be more intersting than mine so tell me whats new.reply asap.
  26. Maryam Salvotre
    16/03/2012Aphrodite
    yeah like always I am studying its great that you are writing novella may you become successful at it .my cambridge exams are in may and every night I am having nightmares I dont have enough time to open bibliofaction every day due to tution classes which I am attending everyday I hardly have time.for anything else now the motto of my life is study ,study and study.i bet your life would be more intersting than mine so tell me whats new.reply asap.
  27. Maryam Salvotre
    16/03/2012Aphrodite
    yeah like always I am studying its great that you are writing novella may you become successful at it .my cambridge exams are in may and every night I am having nightmares I dont have enough time to open bibliofaction every day due to tution classes which I am attending everyday I hardly have time.for anything else now the motto of my life is study ,study and study.i bet your life would be more intersting than mine so tell me whats new.reply asap.
  28. Frankie Maltby
    11/03/2012Ribbit
    Sorry to hear about your computer, I know I'd be lost without mine and Thanks for your message it was really motivational
  29. Jessica Sparks
    10/03/2012mileyrocks01
    Oh i will soonly make another story just thinking how 2 write it
  30. Frankie Maltby
    03/03/2012Ribbit
    It seems like it will take some time for me to make a video whatever I end up making, but it will be on YouTube and I will let you know when I make it. Right now I'm looking into film courses and writing courses but am having some difficulty finding where to go but maybe reviewing will be of use. Thanks for the encouragment
  31. Maryam Salvotre
    02/03/2012Aphrodite
    hey paul how are u its been a long time since we chatted i missed ya a lot so how are u getting on wit life
  32. Jessica Sparks
    01/03/2012mileyrocks01
    Yes paul the italian is from our mothers side of the family and Ti amo is i luv you in Itlian Quando fa fredo is i am cold and i know how to say tons more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!The name Sparks came from my dads side of the family
  33. Frankie Maltby
    01/03/2012Ribbit
    I do enjoy critiquing, Iv'e been thinking about making videos for a while now and there's a few things I want to try that sort of involve critiquing.
  34. Jessica Sparks
    01/03/2012mileyrocks01
    yes me and Jessica used 2 talk in Italiano all the time!!
  35. Jessica Sparks
    28/02/2012mileyrocks01
    No problem Paul By the way i and my sis are from Sicily An Island by Rome,Me and my sis are full blooded Italiano,
    I happen to love Italian food hahaha
    so did Jessica are last name is
    Mazzola(:
  36. Joshua Schwarzenbach
    28/02/2012jidery
    Hey paul, I asked a quick question on my story and I don't think you noticed it.

    I am really just curious as to what you mean by 'too wordy' or some ideas are 'too much'? Can you give me some examples?
  37. Paul Y.
    28/02/2012PaulY
    Ah Nikki, such a sweet name..Rachel is your middle. I think I will crown queen Nikki. Nikki is a Russian spelling, Rachel is actually a Hebrew. My name is actually Palo in Portuguese and Italian and sometimes Pauli or Paulo. My last name is from Spain but I have Portuguese and Moroccan blood lines.

    Anyway, I appreciate you reading my stories and commenting so nicely on them. I write mostly mellow stories on this site. Other sites I write stories that are violent,drama and action.
  38. Jessica Sparks
    27/02/2012mileyrocks01
    Hey Paul my names not Rachel Its my middle name Rachel,My real
    name is Nicole but u can call me
    Nikki(:hahaha and ima right more
    Poems soon!(: I just need
    2 think what kind of poemetry i
    should write .......?
  39. Joshua Schwarzenbach
    27/02/2012jidery
    Hey Paul, thanks for the feedback on 'The lost boy', I appreciate it.
  40. Federico Rea
    27/02/2012FedericoRea
    Thanks dude! once i get some time to relax i shall give them a read.

    cheers bro!
  41. Jessica Sparks
    26/02/2012mileyrocks01
    okay
  42. Paul Y.
    26/02/2012PaulY
    Hey Rachel, the story ALICE is a ghost story about a girl who died in a car accident. It's a cute one, not scary. You might like it.
  43. Jessica Sparks
    26/02/2012mileyrocks01
    hey paul i read FEAR and i gotta say its a really good story i liked it alote,Man i miss Jessica i wish she was still here): but nope i guess God wanted her and it was her time.She would of gradutated and went to college.She would of got a good job and made lots of money
    u know the night before she died she told me that she loves me and she will always be here for me then the next night she dies thats just creepy.
  44. Jessica Sparks
    26/02/2012mileyrocks01
    well were twins =D haha
  45. Jessica Sparks
    26/02/2012mileyrocks01
    haha(:kool and okay Paul i will read it(:and in this pic Jess is on the right(:
  46. Jessica Sparks
    26/02/2012mileyrocks01
    Hey Paul for you I will not kill myself your a great friend Paul I promise I won't do anything bad to myself. Thanks for all your help luv u to Paul
  47. Federico Rea
    26/02/2012FedericoRea
    sorry for the two comments my laptop froze
  48. Federico Rea
    26/02/2012FedericoRea
    hey buddy!
    i am in the middle of turning "Killer Ghost" into a script but its taking me some time because of alot of college and then my job and everything. So much to do and so little time. but im wondering if you have any stories something like "MAD MEN" im very interested in filming something with heavy diolog.

    cheers bro!
  49. Federico Rea
    26/02/2012FedericoRea
    hey buddy!
    i am in the middle of turning "Killer Ghost" into a script but its taking me some time because of alot of college and then my job and everything. So much to do and so little time. but im wondering if you have any stories something like "MAD MEN" im very interested in filming something with heavy diolog.

    cheers bro!
  50. Frankie Maltby
    25/02/2012Ribbit
    Just realised I haven't responded to your comment. I was a bit unsure with the sentence flow so I'm glad you mentioned it. I was thinking of putting everything in to one part and rewriting it and explaining things in the begining and getting rid of things like changes to the sentence flow, I'm also working on a different story at the moment but I don't know when I'll be uploading it. Thanks for the comment.
  51. Joshua Schwarzenbach
    24/02/2012jidery
    No problem man, I look forward to reading more of your writings when I have free time!
  52. Jessica Sparks
    20/02/2012mileyrocks01
    hey paul yes i have been busy and sad my boyfriend dumped me and i miss my sis i have been perinode 2 kill myself but i cant cuz i need 2 live my life as jessica used 2 say): i miss her so much but i do want 2 kill myself cuz i cant take this abuse any longer im sick of being sad i want 2 be healed by the power of god.But its nice talking 2 u paul.
  53. Frankie Maltby
    14/02/2012Ribbit
    Iv'e read all your stories but I felt like I didn't want to leave to many comments when I was reading through them all. I left feedback on your suggested story and am happy to comment on any of your other stories.
  54. Frankie Maltby
    14/02/2012Ribbit
    thanks for the comment about my stories and reviews I do feel reviewing things comes more naturally to me and I need to improve a bit with my stories but i'm optimistic about doing that. I was away from bibliofaction for a while because of some home problems and I wasn't writing for a while but things are essentially back to normal now.I am also trying to make videos right now but i'm not entirely sure what i'm gonna make but my priority at the moment is posting something on bibliofaction.
  55. Yelle Hughes
    12/02/2012Yelle
    Hi PaulY...read the last two and left my feedback. Can I say "Wonderful!"? I loved both of them.
    I've been busy working on illustrations and writing but I will always take some time to get back here. Keep up the good work and thanks for keeping me updated on what you're doing.
  56. Atoofa Najeeb
    08/02/2012AtoOfa NajeeB
    Thank you Paul your comment is really helpful for me..!! thank you for analyzing it and for guiding me..! I appreciate it ...! :)
  57. Federico Rea
    07/02/2012FedericoRea
    hey thanks! im from dublin and was thinking of doing short stories around dublin for a short film and i thought the rock story would play nicely in it. i shall give the other story a read!
    thank you!
  58. Angharad A-Williams
    04/02/2012Huggable_Bubble
    Thank you for your comment :D I didnt take it harshly lol it is all helpful and used to make my writing better. Thanks again. x
  59. Yelle Hughes
    31/01/2012Yelle
    Hi PaulY! You are most welcome! I am enjoying your stories more and more. Your writing improves with each new story and your ability to bring out emotions is way on! I want to catch up with the rest of your stories and also the ones in my faction. I really appreciate this website. Keep up the good work and if you were in front of me, I'd give you a hug too! :)
  60. Yelle Hughes
    25/01/2012Yelle
    Hey PaulY! I really appreciate how you go to everyone and make them feel welcome here, you are so great! If I haven't before, my website is yellehughes.com if you want to learn more about my first novel. I hope I get with this company. I have prayed for that day. I will be looking at your latest soon and give my feedback and that was so sweet what you wrote about Jessica.
  61. Yelle Hughes
    24/01/2012Yelle
    Hi PaulY! I've been out of the loop for awhile, I had been working on my second novel after I finished editing the first. I do have a short story that I want to add here but its not completed yet.
    Yes...I have been very busy. I might have a chance to become published and I need to get everything done.
    I've missed you guy's input and sorry I haven't had a chance to read all of yours but I will be back soon!
  62. Ayame G.
    20/01/2012mistiris
    HI Paul, its been a long time ^^, i never thought Jessica was already gone...i'm so late to the news...anyway, i'm a bit busy on writing and drawing at the same time but i'm trying to finish a story and it has sequel...a sequel of The Gift wish i could finish the 3rd part of it wish me luck...^^
  63. Maryam Salvotre
    10/01/2012Aphrodite
    thanks for the site and tell me what are you doing these days
  64. Frankie Maltby
    07/01/2012Ribbit
    I thought if you said anything about the picture it would be all the frogs, but I guess your used to that by now. In my message about folkestone I meant country as country side so it is in England. Your Christmas sounded more relaxing, but I did get three people to join team frog but I think they have forgotten about it
  65. Frankie Maltby
    06/01/2012Ribbit
    thanks a lot for the comment Paul. the start threw me off because there was already a part one but I see I shouldn't just start off out of no where so I will find some way of making part 3 more natural. I visited my family in folkestone which is somewhere in the countryside, I think. Everyone got drunk except for me but it was odd because I could join in there crazy rambles and shout team frog! because everyone was to drunk to take notice or remember anything. I hope things were fun in america
  66. Paul Y.
    30/12/2011PaulY
    Hi there Rachel. I was a bit worried not getting your response in two days..but your are fine! Yes, this year a lot of good people died and some very close to our hearts. But we have to "move on". We all must die, it's part of life. We fear death because not only we don't know what the next life is about but ones who dies, won't be with us to share the moments anymore. But maybe too they are sorry for us that we have to deal with this pitiful world. Death is a rebirth to a better...
  67. Jessica Sparks
    30/12/2011mileyrocks01
    HI PAUL THATS SO SAD I FEEL SO BAD FOR THE LITLE GIRL WELL I HOPE SHES IN HEAVEN WITH JESSICA AND YES I AM SO HAPPY TAHT CHRISTMAS IS OVER WITH NOW I JUST HAVE TO WORRY ABOUT NEW YEARS WICH STARTS TOMMAROW!!!!!ITS SO HARD WITHOUT JESSICA HEERE WITH ME.
  68. Maryam Salvotre
    29/12/2011Aphrodite
    merry christmas paul i am sorry about late reply i was busy with exams i got third position this time .
  69. Jessica Sparks
    24/12/2011mileyrocks01
    yes i did read it it was very nice (: merry christmas paul and have a happy new year (:
  70. Jessica Sparks
    23/12/2011mileyrocks01
    i got to tell u something paul this used to be her quote my heart is full of love(:
  71. Jessica Sparks
    23/12/2011mileyrocks01
    mERRY CHRISTMAS PAUL HAVE A SAFE NEW YEAR WISH U AND YOUR FAMILY A HAPPY CHRISTMAS I SURE WISH JESSICA WAS HERE TO CELEBRATE WITH US SHE MY MOM MY GRANDMA AND ME WOULD ALWAYS COOK TOGETHER ON HOLIDAYS BUT NOT ANY MORE IM SO DEPRESTED PAUL I WANT JESSICA BACK I WANT MY LIL SIS BACK I AM SO SAD I CANT TAKE IT ANYMORE ): SHE WAS A DOWN TO EARTH GIRL. I BET SHES IN OUR HEARTS AND WILL ALWAYS BE LOOKING DOWN AT US EVERY DAY IN HEAVEN
  72. Jessica Sparks
    20/12/2011mileyrocks01
    huh
  73. Paul Y.
    20/12/2011PaulY
    Rachel, I just posted a dedication on the site, it should be on the FRONT section of the reads. Check it out. :O

    Just read your stuff. I always felt that she smiled a lot. Her stories "smiled" it was so cheerful. Some of the boys/girls around her age that read her stories loved it. I loved it because it was sooo cute..and reminded me when I was her age.
  74. Jessica Sparks
    20/12/2011mileyrocks01
    Yes paul she was very cheerful and she was always smiley on her face thanks so much you guys met on a writing ebsite and you still care thanks so much. She is probably looking down from the clouds right now with a houge smile on her face i know shes happy she does like talk she loved being with the family every friday she would cook spagetti for us. (:
  75. Jessica Sparks
    20/12/2011mileyrocks01
    itz okay ia m very um idk ANGRY!!!! AT THE PERSON THAT HIT HER SHE DOESNT DESERVE BEING HIT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  76. Jessica Sparks
    19/12/2011mileyrocks01
    no i am not changing anything i am just going to be writing more stories for her my parents are taking it very hard and yes its gonna be hard during the holiday season i am taking it VERY HARD i have been snappy lately and very tired deprested and egsousted. She had her funeral already she looked like she was in peace. (:
  77. Paul Y.
    19/12/2011PaulY
    She was only 13..wow, so young..so sad. Your parents probably took it hard, sure puts a damper on the holiday spirits too. But we have to be strong and continue on. There are a lot of crazies this time of year driving on the road. One has to be especially careful. You seemed to be taking it well, I would have crawled into my shell and not write or do anything for a while. Are you going to change her name/info from her profile?
  78. Jessica Sparks
    18/12/2011mileyrocks01
    your welcome and of course i will pick off where she stopped writing.
  79. Jessica Sparks
    18/12/2011mileyrocks01
    she was 13
  80. Yelle Hughes
    18/12/2011Yelle
    Hi PaulY you stay safe as well, I have more of my fellow author's work to read but I wanted to get to yours first.

    Have a very Merry Christmas and a wonderful New Year!
  81. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    and go on youtube type in brokelle lol thats her a video of her ok?
  82. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    Go on the website slide go type in the search box snowangel29 and then go on Brokelle bones that is what we call her cuz she looks just like her and theres a few photos of her on there
  83. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    Go on the website slide go type in the search box snowangel29 and then go on Brokelle bones that is what we call her cuz she looks just like her and theres a few photos of her on there
  84. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    We found out it was a drunk driver Yes Jessica snuk out to go to see this boy and talk to him cuz she liked him she snuk out late and we found out she had died from a drunk driver.
  85. Yelle Hughes
    16/12/2011Yelle
    That is so sad to hear, I received a message from her not too long ago. I feel for the family and my prayers go out to them. Thanks so much for letting me know.
  86. Uma Sreekumar
    16/12/2011umasreekumar
    oh it is unbelievable. was she driving alone. i think she is from your country right. we lost our favorite writer of bibliofaction
  87. Uma Sreekumar
    16/12/2011umasreekumar
    oh it is unbelievable. was she driving alone. i think she is from your country right. we lost our favorite writer of bibliofaction
  88. Paul Y.
    16/12/2011PaulY
    Oh my god!!!!!
    This is so terrible. She was my little friend. Even though I only knew her from BL with the stories, she always wrote me in a cheerful way. I felt she was my little sister and advise her on her writing technique. This brought tears to my eyes. It really did. I will miss her immensely. Thanks you Rachel for having the courage to send me this message. I know it probably was hard for you. Please give me sincerest condolence to your family. I hope I see Jessica when I am gone too.
  89. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    I have decided to save her stories on her and i will write a dedication to her
  90. Jessica Sparks
    16/12/2011mileyrocks01
    Hi paul I am jessicas Sister Rachel i am afriad there has been an tradict acident that happend to her she is in heaven now she died yesterday from a car crash i am sorry i didnt tell u sooner ):
  91. Yelle Hughes
    13/12/2011Yelle
    LOL Yea PaulY, with the holidays I'm not on the computer much, even less time for writing but everything is cool. After the new year I will be back in full swing! Happy Holiday to you!
  92. Karthik Shanmugam
    11/12/2011karsujo
    thanx for your comment. It is extremely helpful. From my point of view, a criticless writer can't be a good writer!
  93. Karthik Shanmugam
    11/12/2011karsujo
    thanx for your comment. It is extremely helpful. From my point of view, a criticless writer can't be a good writer!
  94. Karthik Shanmugam
    11/12/2011karsujo
    thanx for your comment. It is extremely helpful. From my point of view, a criticless writer can't be a good writer!
  95. Karthik Shanmugam
    11/12/2011karsujo
    thanx for your comment. It is extremely helpful. From my point of view, a criticless writer can't be a good writer!
  96. Karthik Shanmugam
    11/12/2011karsujo
    thanx for your comment. It is extremely helpful. From my point of view, a criticless writer can't be a good writer!
  97. Frankie Maltby
    11/12/2011Ribbit
    I liked you comment it was very useful.
    It was supposed to write part 2 but I got distracted by the Narrator and that story just happened it was really weird. I've been obsessed with sonic the hedgehog recently and I have seen a lot of good fan parodies of it so I decided to start my own sonic fan fiction but right now all my attention is on part 2.
  98. Uma Sreekumar
    09/12/2011umasreekumar
    hi pauly i read your comment today only. thanx for your comments. actually i had written this story five years before. that is when i was a bachelor that's why i think some errors occure. what is this profile picture. spider
  99. Jessica Sparks
    07/12/2011mileyrocks01
    No no no......Listen m not trying to be mean but my betta died i still have 2 dogs THE BETTA IS JAWS WHICH IS MY PIC THAT I HAVE NOW THE GoLDfiSh is SAMMY THAT ALSO DIED! OK? GET IT
  100. Frankie Maltby
    07/12/2011Ribbit
    I'm gonna picture that spider writing all your stories now that i have seen that profile picture.
  101. Jessica Sparks
    06/12/2011mileyrocks01
    thats Jaws the betta i have 2 dogs and another goldfish that died do you remember Sammy?
  102. Jessica Sparks
    04/12/2011mileyrocks01
    hey paul i miss your comments
  103. Frankie Maltby
    26/11/2011Ribbit
    I'm still writing but I need to remind my self to write a bit everyday because i'm really slow at getting things done.I am writing mainly about the narrator right now
  104. Frankie Maltby
    26/11/2011Ribbit
    I live in London, but happy thanksgiving to you anyway. a Scrubs movie would be great but I've never heard of such a thing, they did have 9 seasons although the 9th season felt like a completely different show.
  105. Jessica Sparks
    23/11/2011mileyrocks01
    hello 0; my betta died
  106. Yelle Hughes
    22/11/2011Yelle
    Hey PaulY, I missed your question about Gunnar's Game...yea I finished it and it was the last book in the series. It was interesting and had a new take on lycans. May not be your cup of tea but Marie Harte is a great writer.
  107. Yelle Hughes
    22/11/2011Yelle
    Have a Happy Thanksgiving PaulY!!!
  108. Paul Y.
    21/11/2011PaulY
    The other site is called: Short-fiction and the URL is:
    http://www.short-fiction.co.uk/index.php
  109. Frankie Maltby
    21/11/2011Ribbit
    A continuation of the boy who didn't cry wolf or a story similar to it would be great. Although I have to say I love stories about animals which is partly why its my favourite. by the way Whats the other site your on.
  110. Jessica Sparks
    20/11/2011mileyrocks01
    theres good news i have a betta now! i named him jaws
  111. Uma Sreekumar
    20/11/2011umasreekumar
    thank you paul for your comment on non resident. actually it showed the effect of a broken family on the life of all the members of that family.
  112. Jessica Sparks
    20/11/2011mileyrocks01
    yes i am going to my grandmas house and my other grandmas house (: ):
  113. Jessica Sparks
    19/11/2011mileyrocks01
    ok i have some bad newz i just found out this morning well my goldfish (Sammy) went to heaven i was in my bed nd i couldnt really see it that good i turned my light on and i saw him floating in the tank ): that was very depresing i miss him so much but my mom said I CAN GET ANOTHER FISHY! (:
  114. Jessica Sparks
    19/11/2011mileyrocks01
    ok i have some bad newz i just found out this morning well my goldfish (Sammy) went to heaven i was in my bed nd i couldnt really see it that good i turned my light on and i saw him floating in the tank ): that was very depresing i miss him so much but my mom said I CAN GET ANOTHER FISHY! (:
  115. Yelle Hughes
    19/11/2011Yelle
    Hey PaulY, yea I've been away for a bit, dealing with the upcoming holiday and fam. I've been thinking of some subjects I could write about and will be working on it as soon as I can sit down and relax, how's your arm by the way? A story with broken english sounds fascinatin! I see you have another story and I will be commenting on it sometime this weekend, I know it will be great.
    Enjoy the Weekend!!
  116. Jessica Sparks
    18/11/2011mileyrocks01
    well thats good um yes he is doing great!
  117. Frankie Maltby
    16/11/2011Ribbit
    Every time I go on your message board I see the same comment five times in a row and get tempted to invade your screen with frogs again (the first time was a mistake).I saw you told people to read my story that was really nice Paul, thanks from your little buddy Ribbit lol.
  118. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  119. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  120. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  121. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  122. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  123. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    Thank you for your suggestions. It is very useful indeed! I read Haunted House of yours, very thrilling and exciting, of course.
    thank you for reading my work.
    keep up the good work of yours.

    Snowy Owl
  124. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    You one thing, we become friends now. I appreciate your suggestion, it is very thrilling of course. I need to insert your idea in another story.

    I read your story of haunted house,, very thrilling and exciting. You make yourself a great writer. Keep up the good work!



    Loving
    Snowy Owl
  125. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    You one thing, we become friends now. I appreciate your suggestion, it is very thrilling of course. I need to insert your idea in another story.

    I read your story of haunted house,, very thrilling and exciting. You make yourself a great writer. Keep up the good work!



    Loving
    Snowy Owl
  126. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    You one thing, we become friends now. I appreciate your suggestion, it is very thrilling of course. I need to insert your idea in another story.

    I read your story of haunted house,, very thrilling and exciting. You make yourself a great writer. Keep up the good work!



    Loving
    Snowy Owl
  127. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    You one thing, we become friends now. I appreciate your suggestion, it is very thrilling of course. I need to insert your idea in another story.

    I read your story of haunted house,, very thrilling and exciting. You make yourself a great writer. Keep up the good work!

    Thank you for commenting on my work. It is very useful to me.

    Loving
    Snowy Owl
  128. Shiva Kadireshion
    14/11/2011Snowy Owl
    hi friend

    You one thing, we become friends now. I appreciate your suggestion, it is very thrilling of course. I need to insert your idea in another story.

    I read your story of haunted house,, very thrilling and exciting. You make yourself a great writer. Keep up the good work!

    Thank you for commenting on my work. It is very useful to me.

    Loving
    Snowy Owl
  129. Frankie Maltby
    12/11/2011Ribbit
    thanks for the feedback. I found it funny that you gave me a grade,as I've not seen it on bibliofaction before, but it's a useful system and i'm really glad I got a B+
  130. Yelle Hughes
    11/11/2011Yelle
    I can't wait to read it PaulY...I know it's gonna be good!
  131. Roger Hailey
    11/11/2011attain
    Right here it sent this message twice...sorry. R
  132. Roger Hailey
    11/11/2011attain
    Thanks for the "heads up" Paul. I deleted the story and will re-publish it when it takes it correctly. I've been having some trouble with formatting from WORD to bibliofaction, which seems strange to me, since WORD is so common. Do you ever have issues copying and pasting to the site? Thanks again. R
  133. Roger Hailey
    11/11/2011attain
    Thanks for the "heads up" Paul. I deleted the story and will re-publish it when it takes it correctly. I've been having some trouble with formatting from WORD to bibliofaction, which seems strange to me, since WORD is so common. Do you ever have issues copying and pasting to the site? Thanks again. R
  134. Maryam Salvotre
    08/11/2011Aphrodite
    I mailed you.sorry about not leaving my name
  135. Maryam Salvotre
    08/11/2011Aphrodite
    sorry about posting it 3 times .i just messed up ur profile page.i am really very sorry.
  136. Maryam Salvotre
    08/11/2011Aphrodite
    paul i think you know every single person who is member of bibliofaction.it seems that you have read every single story ever published here.every profile page have your comments.
  137. Maryam Salvotre
    08/11/2011Aphrodite
    paul i think you know every single person who is member of bibliofaction.it seems that you have read every single story ever published here.every profile page have your comments.
  138. Maryam Salvotre
    08/11/2011Aphrodite
    paul i think you know every single person who is member of bibliofaction.it seems that you have read every single story ever published here.every profile page have your comments.why is that so?
  139. Uma Sreekumar
    08/11/2011umasreekumar
    hi pauly i got only few comments for golden earrings as it was a sad story thnx for the comment
  140. Yelle Hughes
    07/11/2011Yelle
    Thanks PaulY that's so sweet!
  141. Yelle Hughes
    06/11/2011Yelle
    I'm sure I missed a lot of responses to comments I've made, it would be nice if there was a reply button to comments so that it goes directly to the person instead of having to go to their page everytime.
  142. Maryam Salvotre
    06/11/2011Aphrodite
    Sorry for not mailing .my exams are coming n i dont have any preparation n i am scared .
  143. Maryam Salvotre
    06/11/2011Aphrodite
    i read your story what a doll.it was well written .i want to ask how many bibliobucks do you have?
  144. Yelle Hughes
    06/11/2011Yelle
    The main thing that fascinated me about them was though they were gods they were very human...goofy,evil, silly, stupid, cheaters, vunerable, sweet and evil...but with powers lol!
  145. Paul Y.
    06/11/2011PaulY
    I think I will do some research on GM and see what I come up with pending a story. I used to see movies of Sindbad and that was the closest to that mythology, there was the gargoyles and stuff like that. GM is more deep of course. I am always interested in writing different styles.
  146. Yelle Hughes
    06/11/2011Yelle
    Hi PaulY!
    I just won't be on as much but I'll? Make sure to read yours. I think you would be great at writing GM. U can find the stories anywhere. A few titles I suggested. Theseus, Perseus, Cupid&Psyche and Orpheus. Movies have been made about them but don't watch first. U can get a quik read and closest to the original story on Wikipedia. Also my website yellehughes.com gives info but with my own spin. If u have any questions feel free
  147. Uma Sreekumar
    05/11/2011umasreekumar
    thanks pauly what about your hand
  148. Paul Y.
    05/11/2011PaulY
    Ribbit..ribbit!! Yes sometimes Bibliofaction is so slow that if you hit "post" a few times it would do it the amount of times you hit it. It's not an advance system like most others.

    Yep, I change my profile picture A-GAIN, I get board seeing the old stuff all the time. I suppose you like frogs or are you waiting for a nice princess to kiss you (the frog) so you can be a prince. --just kid'n.. :0)
  149. Frankie Maltby
    04/11/2011Ribbit
    sorry about posting the same thing 4 times. I clicked the post message icon but nothing happened so I thought I didn't do it right, as I'm not used to this laptop. Now it looks like you've been invaded by frogs
  150. Frankie Maltby
    04/11/2011Ribbit
    Jeez you changed your profile icon again. I like this one, but the monkey's still number 1.
  151. Frankie Maltby
    04/11/2011Ribbit
    Jeez you changed your profile icon again. I like this one, but the monkey's still number 1.
  152. Frankie Maltby
    04/11/2011Ribbit
    Jeez you changed your profile icon again. I like this one, but the monkey's still number 1.
  153. Frankie Maltby
    04/11/2011Ribbit
    Jeez you changed your profile icon again. I like this one, but the monkey's still number 1.
  154. Uma Sreekumar
    04/11/2011umasreekumar
    i am in india
  155. Morbid Kicked
    03/11/201196456
    sorry. I meant "and write better sentences"
  156. Morbid Kicked
    03/11/201196456
    Thank you PaulY. I will do my best to follow your advice on write better sentences. It was very helpful.
  157. Paul Y.
    03/11/2011PaulY
    My feeling is that your are TOTALLY OUT OF LINE IN YOUR CRITIQUES: I have noticed you used words in other writer's works like "sucks" "Please don't write anymore", those are not motivational words to young and beginning writers. You should offer suggestions to help or don't critique. You should not compare also, make negative references. As far as I'm concerned one should only critique on content because I don't see any editors or published writers on this site.
  158. Yelle Hughes
    01/11/2011Yelle
    Holidays are coming up and I have a big family with a bunch of little kids, so my days have been crazy. Had to walk kids to trick or treat for the first time in about 10 years lol!
    I used to watch football all the time but not lately so I don't know who's on who's team but will always and forever be a Bronco fan!
  159. Uma Sreekumar
    01/11/2011umasreekumar
    how is your hand now and what happened.
  160. Yelle Hughes
    29/10/2011Yelle
    Thanks Paul :)
  161. Jessica Sparks
    27/10/2011mileyrocks01
    hope u get better
  162. Jessica Sparks
    26/10/2011mileyrocks01
    yes i am being the game Twister and im going to trick or treat and watch horror
    movies all night
  163. Uma Sreekumar
    26/10/2011umasreekumar
    hi paul it was a real incident that's why it doesn't have that much feeling
  164. Uma Sreekumar
    26/10/2011umasreekumar
    hi paul it was a real incident that's why it doesn't have that much feeling
  165. Yelle Hughes
    26/10/2011Yelle
    It's wet and cold here, tried to get back out to the driving range and messed up my shoes :( Well that sounds like an interesting story and can't wait to read it. I have something that I had been working on and wasn't sure if I was going to submit but I might as well. I'm about to read "Haunted House" will let you know what I think
  166. Yelle Hughes
    26/10/2011Yelle
    I'm in northern Ohio, it's 10am here. Do you have a recorder on your computer that will translate into words? I have something like that on my phone and wonder if they have it for the computer but I'm sure you will find a way but take it easy and let your body heal.
  167. Paul Y.
    26/10/2011PaulY
    I have a cast on my favorite writing arm. I think i will write a very short stories(a page or two). I miss writing. I was wondering which state/town are you in? It just after 7 am in Califronia,near san francisco.
  168. Yelle Hughes
    26/10/2011Yelle
    Oh Paul, sorry to hear that. I haven't been here for a couple of days myself. I hope everything's okay and I'm working on catching up with everyone's stories.

    I haven't written thing as of late but will have something on here in a couple of days.
  169. Paul Y.
    26/10/2011PaulY
    If the goldfishes are about the same size or even if the smaller one is big enough not to fit in the bigger one's mouth you are ok. It's best to get both them about the same size.

    What you doing for Halloween..are you going tick and treating?
  170. Jessica Sparks
    25/10/2011mileyrocks01
    ok i cant get two cause my mom will think that Sammy will eat the othr
    one
  171. Jessica Sparks
    24/10/2011mileyrocks01
    oh yes (: he is doing great! he is very active. And he swims FAST!!!!
  172. Maryam Salvotre
    21/10/2011Aphrodite
    Can i have your email address?
  173. Maryam Salvotre
    21/10/2011Aphrodite
    Where do u live?
  174. Maryam Salvotre
    21/10/2011Aphrodite
    I moved from greece to pakistan .currently i am living in pakistan
  175. Maryam Salvotre
    21/10/2011Aphrodite
    U r a diligent person cause u rewrite ur stories but i swear that i write every song in 5 min n i never rewrite or edit it cause i am so lazy n u really a good writer n i envy u!
  176. Jessica Sparks
    20/10/2011mileyrocks01
    um ok goood luck!
  177. Jessica Sparks
    19/10/2011mileyrocks01
    and yes i have not been on 4 a while cuz i have been so tired and been going to school
  178. Jessica Sparks
    19/10/2011mileyrocks01
    I think you should write about a peaceful animal like a dove or
    a swan and tell the reader
    your adventure u had
    with that animal
  179. Yelle Hughes
    19/10/2011Yelle
    I just read "As my heart slowly melted" and this is by far the most emotionally driven work I've seen from you and wonderfully written.
  180. Yelle Hughes
    19/10/2011Yelle
    LOL Paul! I challenge you to write different scenario's for "It happened one weekend" I bet they will be hilarious!
  181. Jessica Sparks
    18/10/2011mileyrocks01
    hi
  182. Maryam Salvotre
    18/10/2011Aphrodite
    Thnx 4 ur advice n i loved ur analogy
  183. Yelle Hughes
    17/10/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul! I realized after I published it that it was very short. I could go on for days about my adventures in SL. It is way to let your imagination go to levels you could could only dream about.

    I joined for my craft but got an added bonus to play as well. Even got to do skydiving and motorcycle riding...crashed a lot but at least I walked away from it laughing.
  184. Yelle Hughes
    17/10/2011Yelle
    Well Paul, like I said before, you did a great job writing as a girl, you got are weirdness around boys just right lol! That's what I need to work on when writing as a man.
  185. Paul Y.
    16/10/2011PaulY
    Ha haha, i didn't really take a shower for that poem but it was sexy. I hope I wasn't too mean on my comment on the other. I think you have great ideas/imagery but the format of it should be like a poem (or lyrical song). I have a analogy:
    You poem is like a beautiful flowering plant, it just needs a bit of pruning.
  186. Maryam Salvotre
    16/10/2011Aphrodite
    Thnx 4 ur sincere comments i hope u reply soon after taking cold shower
  187. Maryam Salvotre
    15/10/2011Aphrodite
    check out my new songs
    "yours "and
    "fight 4 u"
  188. Maryam Salvotre
    15/10/2011Aphrodite
    no had goldfishes but it died n i am gonna write my next song
  189. Frankie Maltby
    15/10/2011Ribbit
    Sorry I took so long to respond.I'm currently writing something about people who want adventure in there lives and unintentionally meet each other in a forest.I read some of your poetry,which I really liked and I'll start reeding your suggestions now. Oh, and I miss that monkey. now whenever I read your stuff I picture a chalk board writing it.
  190. Maryam Salvotre
    13/10/2011Aphrodite
    I wanna see ur goldfish
  191. Jessica Sparks
    12/10/2011mileyrocks01
    I got a Goldfish!!! (: its name is Sammy i named it sammy im so happy with him
  192. Yelle Hughes
    11/10/2011Yelle
    Hi PaulY, I'm not all that sure about what constitutes plagiarism but to be sure, I suggest you change the way of the killer's demise,both got hit by cars. If you want to keep the killer anonymous by all means, don't change it. It's your story and ur right, it keeps him mysterious, otherwise good job on writing a thriller story!
  193. Jessica Sparks
    11/10/2011mileyrocks01
    um............well i am 11 im so close to being 12 in this month also um....
    yes i will read this
  194. Yelle Hughes
    11/10/2011Yelle
    Hi PaulY, sure I will read "KG" I've been working down the line in getting to a few more but I will let you know what I think :)
  195. Yelle Hughes
    11/10/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul, glad you liked "TBBBW" I think I enjoy trying to get people to laugh at my quirky humor.
  196. Jessica Sparks
    10/10/2011mileyrocks01
    Well i am not agsactly sure what im going to name it yet and um.......
    yes i will write a story about the fish i did not get it yet i might get a Clown fish or a goldfish i cant have two because my mom says it is hard work!
  197. Jessica Sparks
    10/10/2011mileyrocks01
    yes but right now in Michigan it is about 77 % and tonight it is supposed
    to be like 50 deg. Also thx for commenting on my story the little leaf um the trouble i have is the publishing i am also getting my first fish tommorow! I AM SO EXITED!!!! I AM NAMING IT NEMO
  198. Jessica Sparks
    10/10/2011mileyrocks01
    yes but right now in Michigan it is about 77 % and tonight it is supposed
    to be like 50 deg. Also thx for commenting on my story the little leaf um the trouble i have is the publishing i am also getting my first fish tommorow! I AM SO EXITED!!!! I AM NAMING IT NEMO
  199. Jessica Sparks
    09/10/2011mileyrocks01
    I live in Michigan! (:
  200. Jessica Sparks
    09/10/2011mileyrocks01
    I live in Michigan! (:
  201. Yelle Hughes
    09/10/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul, things have finally slowed down so I can get back to work on my stories and reviewing others. I read your latest and I say kudos to great work!
  202. Yelle Hughes
    09/10/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul, things have finally slowed down so I can get back to work on my stories and reviewing others. I read your latest and I say kudos to great work!
  203. Maryam Salvotre
    09/10/2011Aphrodite
    i have written a new song plz check it out.
  204. Jessica Sparks
    09/10/2011mileyrocks01
    hi pauly um.........thx 4 commenting on my stories i really appreicate it! i could tell you liked the story Halloween Night the one i wrote i am writing alote of halloween stories because in the USA which is where i live it is close to Halloween!
  205. Jessica Sparks
    09/10/2011mileyrocks01
    sure thx 4 the edvice
  206. Jessica Sparks
    09/10/2011mileyrocks01
    sure thx 4 the edvice
  207. Yelle Hughes
    09/10/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul, lol no M hasn't bothered me. You're right, I had a very busy couple of days. My sis just had her baby and I've been doing a lot for her. So my nights have been about getting some sleep lol but I will be back to read what you posted and I know they will be very good.
    Thanks so much to asking about me.
  208. Maryam Salvotre
    07/10/2011Aphrodite
    Ur most welcome ur story was so magnificient that it deserve a nice comment.
  209. Jessica Sparks
    07/10/2011mileyrocks01
    you are not trying to copy me right? look i am no good at drawing or writing ever since i was in about 1st grade i always didntlike my writing my sister can write so perfect and kidsa in my class always brag about how good they write and draw ): it makes me feel sad i feel like i am the worst writer ever!
  210. Jessica Sparks
    05/10/2011mileyrocks01
    dont worry you werent to mean i mean like i could admit my stories arent long enough i feel like they arent even good i hate my stories I dont feel that they arent even good plzz reply back (:
  211. Deadus Lavoisier
    04/10/2011Deadus Lavoisier
    I dont need you to tell me how unappealing my story is and by the way stop being a cyber bully!
  212. Roger Hailey
    01/10/2011attain
    Hi Paul, Thanks for the kind words re: Shadows of Death Valley. "Follow Us" as we have short stories coming VERY soon on...A Prison Story,...A failed Terrorist Plot (from a Heroes Perspective), Science Fiction, Indiana Jones type story, A Nightmare, and much more. Kindest Regards and thanks again.
  213. Paul Y.
    29/09/2011PaulY
    Yelle, missed your last message, was in my spam again..don't know why!!? Anyway, you are absolute right about some of the rude people on this site. Even if someone's story is not so good, that is not right to be so negative and nasty. When I critique a story and it's not so good, I also give positives. For every one negative I find two positives. No one is better than anyone in this site, if they were they would be somewhere else (better). You just keep on developing your "creative...
  214. Yelle Hughes
    27/09/2011Yelle
    Paul I've dealt with publishers and editors and they no better than to be that rude.

    I know some of my work can be confusing but if you really look at it, it makes sense or it just makes sense to me lol. There is a lot of lore on hell-hounds and I just added my two cents.

    One thing I cannot stand is when someone degrades a new writer's work and it's not constructive criticism at that.
  215. Yelle Hughes
    27/09/2011Yelle
    Thanks Paul, I was trying something different than what I usually write and yes I can always improve but I wanted to post my weird story about a hellhound, I guess I wanted folks to question what he was then find out in the end. I liked the concept and will work on fitting it all together but her remarks were unnecessary, I seen her negativity too much and I had to say something.
  216. Yelle Hughes
    26/09/2011Yelle
    Not a problem, I thought it was quite funny, like you said "Life is too short" enjoy it when you can. I'm working on another and hope to have it posted tonight.
  217. Paul Y.
    26/09/2011PaulY
    Sorry about the comment on beers. I'm with my buddies this weekend, and they were having a party while I was doing my writing. I go to Univ.of Southern Cal, and I live in a dorm with a bunch of "stud muffins", some of them think they are "all that and a bag of chips";some of them even get wasted on weekends. I'm ok now. I just finished writing another story.
  218. Yelle Hughes
    26/09/2011Yelle
    You are too funny! Beer...really?!
  219. Jessica Sparks
    24/09/2011mileyrocks01
    Hi pauly tahnks for reading the heaven story! hope u liked it
  220. Yelle Hughes
    23/09/2011Yelle
    LOL on your last comment!
  221. Yelle Hughes
    23/09/2011Yelle
    If you noticed in "Interview with a Pornstar" I made a big ole flub lol. I wrote that piece and I also wrote it more x-rated. I had changed the name of my reporter and when I pasted it here, I forgot to take Ari's name out. I tried to fix it but Bib didn't post the change. So it happens all the time and I'm really bad at catching them even after reading it over 20 times.
  222. Yelle Hughes
    22/09/2011Yelle
    Hi Paul, haven't posted any erotic stories anywhere yet but my novel it pretty racy and you get all that and more. Once I do, I will let you know if you want to read them.
    Thanks for the compliments...makes me smile.
  223. Ayame G.
    22/09/2011mistiris
    thanks again for reading Her Heart, i never thought i did it its been years :)i think was in 1st year high when i wrote that. i just put my thoughts and feelings to it. anyway, thanks again.
  224. Yelle Hughes
    22/09/2011Yelle
    Thanks Paul, couldn't get to erotic but I do have work that runs right past the PG.
  225. Aaron Robinette
    20/09/2011aaron_robinette
    Thanks for your posative feedback, it is indeed inspiring. Aaron.
  226. Jack Steel
    20/09/2011PythonWorshipper
    Haha, I suppose that's just the way it goes isn't it? I can only think that you're perhaps overdoing it a bit when you spend more time on them. Rather like when a record is overproduced if you like, sometimes they're better raw. But then again what would I know, in my ignorance of poetry? :P
  227. Yelle Hughes
    19/09/2011Yelle
    You are very welcome, I enjoyed reading your work.
  228. Howlyn  KEFTS
    18/09/2011mindeye
    Thank you for taking the time to read my story. Your feedback was much appreciated :)
  229. Jessica Sparks
    14/09/2011mileyrocks01
    be honest do u like to read my stories? ); it seems like u dont
  230. Jessica Sparks
    11/09/2011mileyrocks01
    no problem
  231. Jack Steel
    06/09/2011PythonWorshipper
    Thanks again, glad you liked my story
  232. Jack Steel
    06/09/2011PythonWorshipper
    Thanks for the comments, I did actually have a very specific plot in mind while writing it, but I felt like writing a story where everything is inferred, rather than actually told, and therefore an actual plot isn't really obvious. It did also have my best attempt at a philosophic/poetic expression as you put it, thrown in there as well, glad you appreciated that bit :) But anyway thanks, most appreciated.
  233. Chrissie Bligh
    14/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    As ever, thanks for taking the time to read and comment upon my story "Atomic Cycle". I guess my stories are just ones that don't interest you. I am at a very different life stage to you, and live in a different culture. What interests me does not interest you, and vice versa. I expect the published authors I enjoy are not the same as you enjoy. Fortunately, I know from feedback I've had in vivo that my stories are not boring to all readers. Perhaps you should stop reading my stories!
  234. Chrissie Bligh
    14/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    Thanks for taking the time to read and comment upon my story "Atomic Cycle". I guess my stories are just ones that don't interest you. I am at a very different life stage to you, and live in a different culture. What interests me does not interest you, and vice versa. I expect the published authors I enjoy are not the same as you enjoy. Fortunately, I know from feedback I've had in vivo that my stories are not boring to all readers.
  235. Chrissie Bligh
    07/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    ....incredibly frustrating in the the 500 char limit actively discourages proper constructive critique. I'm less interested in whether people like or don't like my stories than I am in why they like or don't like them. I want to learn, not just collect praise or condemnations. I've started using a site called writingforums that has a much higher standard of critique. You might be interested in looking at it.
  236. Chrissie Bligh
    07/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    Re "My Love", I don't think it's good enough just to say a story is boring. The underlying story is loosely based on a real story that hit the headlines here in the UK and is clearly a story that had great public interest. So if the underlying story is interesting, then what is it about my style that has made it boring? I have just had feedback on several of my stories from a published scriptwriting friend, and he picked out "My Love" as the best of my stories. I find...
  237. Chrissie Bligh
    07/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    Thanks for your comment on "Chicken Soup". Yes, I cold have developed it in all sorts of ways. I was tempted to enlarge and follow through on the drame of Madge and Phillip, but in the end decided just to leave it as that brief cameo. It made me think of my own son, who in his last year at school was very close to me and very much loved, but at the same time very much ready to fly the nest and go to uni. Not that we had a Madge or that he ever had to sleep on a sofa-bed!
  238. Chrissie Bligh
    04/08/2011Marmalade Queen
    Thanks taking the time to feedback on "My Love" but as with feedback I've had before, you don't actually give a critique that is of any value in analysing why the story is boring, if indeed it is. My son, for example, said he really enjoyed it. The problem with Bibliofaction is that you don't get any constructive critique that helps you to improve. I think I have found another site that does provide a better quality of critique. The word limit here doesn't help.
  239. Bill Donnell
    24/07/2011finkland
    Hi Paul,

    Looking for more stories from you.
    Thanks for your comments.
    Bill
  240. Paul Y.
    21/07/2011PaulY
    That's funny Bill in that you have a girl friend who doesn't speak much English but is no help for a writer like you that may need some support or feedback in your time of need. I go to a meeting for poet/writers once a month that critiques my work (they are a lot harsher than you guys) and they fill me in on the business too. I don't imagine you have those resources where you are.
  241. Bill Donnell
    21/07/2011finkland
    Hi Paul, I read your suggestion on the story "The Soul" I'm taking your advice and going to work on it. Thanks. Just published another- "Dr. Livingston I Presume"
    My Girlfriend, living with me here in Bangkok, doesn't speak enough English to be much help. Thanks again.
  242. Bill Donnell
    19/07/2011finkland
    HiPaul

    I wouldn't bother editing your story on the board. it's good enough to stay. I don't either.

    I wonder if you could give me some criticism on my latest, "The Soul" It's short. I just started writing recently and any feedback would be a big help. Be as brutal as you wish. I've read all your work- looking to see more.

    Bill
  243. Antonio H.
    12/06/2011amh2000
    Thanks PaulY. I was really excited about posting this story I barely double checked it. But next time I will triple check my stories super carefully. Thanks for the addvice and for being the stories first comment. Hope you you tell others if they made a little mistake. It teaches them to be a way better writer. Have a nice rest of the day. Also check out my other storie Alone and Scared if you want. And you can comment on it if you want to.Good luck writing and have a good rest of the day.
  244. Braden Graham
    08/06/2011cosmicbraden
    Hello! If you are stuck writing and would like to take a look at my story or poem, I welcome you to do so. Best of luck with your writing!

    *** cosmicbraden ***
Fullname
Paul Y.
Username
PaulY
Gender
Male
Age
1988-the year of the Dragon.
About Me
My mom thinks I'm affectionate but tend to be sarcastic, my dad thinks I have a bad attitude but I'm goal oriented, my younger sister thinks my girlfriend deserves better, and my younger brother and I have a battle of wits. -:) I attend a university in California, USA. Apart from that I've been writing stories since high school, got a couple of awards and I'm finishing up a novel soon. My mom is an author that writes in Portuguese, and I have a cousin that writes for a political magazine. We're kind-of a family of writers..if we don't write, we find time to argue about things to discuss, so we write! I enjoy writing more then reading as I feel I have a well develop imagination. --:0 I wish that everyone becomes a writer of their dreams.

My Favourite...

Author
Mark Twain (he has such a unique style, I often feel I was in the stories when I was younger).
Quote
To do My Best and let that Stand, the record of my brain and Hand, but if should failure come to Me still work and home for Victory (my credo)
Hero
Spider Man
Villain
Terminator
Opening Line
Hey Girl, you remind me of a parking ticket. You got FINE written all over you!
Closing Line
If you kiss me, I'll Kiss You Back. If you hug me, I'll Hug You Back. If you Cheat on me, You'll Never See Me Back.
Place to Read
Reading in the car, as I spy on my girlfriend who went into a strange building (or reading on my bed)
Music
Dance Music (pop, electronica, and head banging music)
Play
I play keyboards & guitar with a latino band.
Piece of Art
A bronze catholic cross from my grandmother (130 years old).

My All-time Favourite Books

No. 1
The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn, (1885 Adventure) by Mark Twain _ I read 14 of his books since I was 11 but this one stands out.
No. 2
The Lord of the Rings, (1955, fantasy) by J. R. R. Tolkien
No. 3
The Relativity of Wrong (1988, SciFi) by Issac Asimov
No. 4
The Devil to Pay (2006, Adventure) by Harold Robbins
No. 5
What the Night Knows (2010, Thriller) by Dean Koontz

Paul is following:

  1. Syedia AishahSyedia Aishah
    aishah
  2. Jennie B.Jennie B.
    xxPeaceGirlxx
  3. Zainab DandiaZainab Dandia
    ZD2885
  4. Dave EastbourneDave Eastbourne
    Vonnage
  5. Sarah FergusonSarah Ferguson
    Miss mooncat
  6. Antonio H.Antonio H.
    amh2000
  7. Roger HaileyRoger Hailey
    attain
  8. Yelle HughesYelle Hughes
    Yelle
  9. Frankie MaltbyFrankie Maltby
    Ribbit
  10. Maryam SalvotreMaryam Salvotre
    Aphrodite
  11. MR. XMR. X
    Mr. X

Paul's faction of followers:

  1. Sara A.Sara A.
    Tixon
  2. Shelley AdamsShelley Adams
    hotcat123
  3. Syedia AishahSyedia Aishah
    aishah
  4. Matthew BrinesMatthew Brines
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  8. Dave EastbourneDave Eastbourne
    Vonnage
  9. Sarah FergusonSarah Ferguson
    Miss mooncat
  10. Ayame G.Ayame G.
    mistiris
  11. Roger HaileyRoger Hailey
    attain
  12. Alana HardingAlana Harding
    Free2Bme
  13. Colby HeenanColby Heenan
    poesprotige89
  14. Yelle HughesYelle Hughes
    Yelle
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    Snowy Owl
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    Ribbit
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    ivanna2330
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  27. Paul RaimiPaul Raimi
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  29. The RedVultureThe RedVulture
    The RedVulture
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    aaron_robinette
  31. Andrew RochesterAndrew Rochester
    Endy08
  32. Maryam SalvotreMaryam Salvotre
    Aphrodite
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